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Week 12 of the “2 Scripts in 2024” Challenge

We are writing a screenplay! And, believe it or not, we are almost done with our second act. You deserve a ribbon for that alone. Cause most writers never make it out of the second act.

If you missed out on previous articles in this series, I’ve listed them below.

Week 1 – Concept
Week 2 – Solidifying Your Concept
Week 3 – Building Your Characters
Week 4 – Outlining
Week 5 – The First 10 Pages
Week 6 – Inciting Incident
Week 7 – Turn Into 2nd Act
Week 8 – Fun and Games
Week 9 – Using Sequences to Tackle Your Second Act
Week 10 – The Midpoint
Week 11 – Chill Out or Ramp Up

If you’re at page 70 and are new to this screenwriting game, you’re probably intimidated as F&%$. I don’t blame you. It’s scary. We’re in no man’s land right now. But don’t worry. Based on our 110 page screenplay length, we’ve got only 15 pages left before we segue into our third act.

We’ve been covering the second act for a while now so it’s a good time to remind you what the five major components of the second act are.

  1. Hero should be moving towards their goal.
  2. You need to throw many obstacles at your hero to make pursuing that goal difficult.
  3. Explore unresolved relationships.
  4. Explore how your hero’s primary flaw is getting in their way.
  5. Move secondary character subplots forward (if you have them).

As long as you’re doing one of those five things, you’re moving in the right direction. The only difference between how you address those things NOW, towards the END of the second act, as opposed to the beginning of it, is that now everything is more intense.

Achieving the goal seems to get harder every second.
The obstacles only get bigger.
The relationships feel like they’re on the brink of extermination.
Your hero’s flaw is eating them alive, getting in the way of everything.
The subplots are all coming to a head.

But let’s get more specific.

What we know about the end of the second act is that it’s where our “DEATH SCENE” is. Not literally (although it can be). But the idea with the end of the second act is that our hero will have tried EVERYTHING to achieve his goal. And yet, he’ll have unequivocally failed. This is when both the protagonist and the audience should feel like “WE’VE LOST.”

So if we back up fifteen pages from that moment, we have to ask ourselves, “What leads up to that lowest point?” And usually, it’s when your hero has put in their BIGGEST PUSH. Or, at least, the biggest push they believe they’re capable of in this moment in time.

Due to them not yet overcoming their flaw, this late push doesn’t have the full force that our hero is capable of once they do overcome their flaw (which will happen in the climax).

The easiest genre to use to figure out how this works is the Romantic Comedy. We know that the boy is going to lose the girl at the end of the second act. That breakup is the equivalent of death. We see this in The 40 Year Old Virgin. Andy gets in a fight with Trish because she’s frustrated that he keeps avoiding sex. So she storms out, effectively ending their relationship.

So, how do we ramp up to that? We ramp up to that by writing scenes where Andy has opportunities to have sex with Trish but keeps backing out of them. They go on a date. The chemistry is off the charts. They get back to her place. It gets hot and heavy. But then Andy freaks out (cause he’s never had sex before) and makes up an excuse to leave. This makes Trish self-conscious and now she’s starting to doubt whether Andy is attracted to her.

Whenever you’re unsure what scene to write in a script, always go back to the character goal. The character goal will give you your answer. Because, chances are, you need to write a scene that brings you closer to that goal being achieved.

By the way, The 40 Year Old Virgin has a TON of secondary characters. So, much of its late second act is dedicated to covering those storylines. This option is available to you during this segment of the script if you have lots of subplots.

Let’s switch up the genre. In one of the best action movies ever, Predator, the end of the second act is everybody dead except for Dutch (Arnold Schwarzenegger). So, if you back up 20 pages, how do we get to that point?

We get to that point because Dutch and the three remaining survivors are making a run for it. That’s one of the interesting things about the goal in this movie. The goal isn’t to beat the Predator. It’s to escape it. But the Predator tracks the final four and kills them off one by one. So those are the scenes you would write in this section.

In the movie, Life of Pi, which follows a boy and a tiger stuck on a boat together, the end of the second act is them finally getting to land and the tiger jumps out of the boat and runs off.

Although the tiger doesn’t die, it is the equivalent of death for the boy because that tiger is who helped him get through this nightmare of being stranded at sea. And now it’s as if he was never there in the first place.

So you need to ask, what gets us to that point? Well, what’s the goal? The goal is to find land. The scenes that David Magee writes are the boy, Pi, trying to stay motivated. He’s stuck out in the ocean. His sails are busted. He literally can’t move. So the scenes are about looking for meaning in order to keep going.

One of those scenes has a major storm come (A GIANT OBSTACLE!) and essentially kill the tiger. The tiger is lifeless the next morning. Pi then nurses him back to health. It’s not as clear as Predator where our characters are physically moving towards their goal (escape the Predator). But because getting to land requires staying motivated, the goal is simply to find a reason to keep going. For Pi, that motivation is his tiger (Richard Parker).

The big lesson here is that you’re moving towards that DEATH at the end of the second act. So you want to go full-throttle towards that death. Whether it’s characters running away from a killer alien, a giant storm that nearly wipes out your hero and his tiger buddy, or your romantic interest pushing your hero towards something they’re terrified of doing.

Put your foot on the gas. Because in 15 pages, you’re going to hurl your hero into a spectacular crash you masochist!

:)

An excerpt from my upcoming book, “Scriptshadow’s 250 Dialogue Tips”

There was a time when I didn’t think I was ever going to finish this book. There were too many technical obstacles (mainly regarding how ebooks interpret screenplay-formatted text) that required endless troubleshooting. But I’m SOOO excited that I’m finally about to release the book because I truly believe it will be the seminal book on dialogue for the next 50+ years.

It’s a book with 250 dialogue tips. This in an industry where you’re lucky to find someone who can give you 10 dialogue tips. And I just can’t contain how thrilled I am that I can finally share it with you. I already posted the opening of the book the other week. In today’s post, I’m including a segment from the “Conflict” chapter. This is arguably the most important chapter in the book and it contains 21 tips total.

TIP 121 – Make sure there’s conflict built into the relationship of the two characters who are around each other the most in your movie/show – Who are the two characters who will be around each other the most in your script? You need to build conflict into the DNA of that relationship specifically. That way, almost every scene in your movie is guaranteed to have conflict. John and Jane in Mr. and Mrs. Smith, Tony Stark and Steve Rogers in Civil War, Allie and Noah in The Notebook, Lee and Carter in Rush Hour, Danny and Amy in the Netflix show, “Beef.”

TIP 122 – Using worldviews to create conflict – Okay, but how do you build conflict into the DNA of a relationship? One way is to give characters different worldviews. Have them see the world differently. If you do this, your characters will be at odds with each other for an entire movie as opposed to one or two scenes. In the Avengers movies, Tony Stark’s worldview is he’s willing to get dirty to protect the universe. Steve Rogers’ worldview is governed by honesty. He wants to play by the rules. That difference in their worldviews is why the two butt heads so much.

TIP 123 – Embrace the word “NO” – “No” is the OG conflict word. Without it, most conversations become boring. Let’s say your hero tells his wife, “I’m going to the store,” and she replies, “Okay.” How is that going to result in an interesting conversation? Or your assassin asks his handler, “Is it okay if I skip this assassination? I don’t think it’s safe enough.” And the handler replies, “Sure, no problem.” When people agree with people, the conversation immediately stops. This is why you want to integrate “No” (and all forms of it) into your dialogue. Here’s an example from the HBO show, White Lotus. In it, 23 year old Albie has fallen in love with a local Italian prostitute who owes her pimp money. Albie wants to help pay her pimp off, so he comes to his rich father to ask for money.

TIP 124 – Make them work for their meal – The reason “No” is so great for dialogue is that it forces your character to work for their meal. They don’t get a free pass. The above scene goes on for another three minutes and Albie has to resort to offering something to his father to get the money. That’s what makes the scene entertaining – that he has to work so hard for his meal. And he wouldn’t have had to do it if his dad had said, “Yes.”

The Scriptshadow Dialogue Book will be out within the next two weeks. But there’s a chance it could be out A LOT SOONER. So keep checking the site every day!  In the meantime, I do feature script consultations, pilot script consultations, short story consultations, logline consultations.  If you’ve written something, I can help you make it better, whether your issues involve dialogue or anything else.  Mention this post and I will give you 100 dollars off a feature or pilot set of notes!  Carsonreeves1@gmail.com

Tis here!

Movie Crossover Showdown, baby!

We learned that just this weekend, the seemingly impossible-to-please Lucasfilm head, Kathleen Kennedy, greenlit The Acolyte based almost entirely on this movie-crossover pitch: “Frozen meets Kill Bill.”

It goes to show just how powerful movie crossover pitches can be in this business. Something about the right one CLICKS with readers. There have, for sure, been instances when I was on the fence with a logline and a cool movie-crossover pitch sold it for me.

Alas, I quickly learned from the entries that movie-crossover pitches aren’t as easy as they seem. I got a lot of entries where one of the movies in the pitch WAS A BOX OFFICE FAILURE. Never ever pitch movies that did poorly at the box office. Or even neutral. They have to be big box office winners or major awards winners.

Also, I got a lot of movie crossovers that were basically the same movie! I.E. “Joker meets Taxi Driver.” The power of the crossover is that you’re pitching two movies that aren’t the same, however, when combined, create something that sounds exciting.

I also encountered several entries that included very obscure movies. You might get some points in your film school class for including “Why Does Herr R. Run Amok?” in your pitch. But it’s not going to get anyone to read your script.

With that said, there were some really fun entries! The hardest part was when someone had a strong crossover pitch but the logline itself didn’t hold up. One of my favorites was, “THE SILENCE OF THE LAMBS meets THE ANDY GRIFFITH SHOW.” That was great.  And there were others.  So I want to thank everyone who took the time to send their pitches in.  If you didn’t make the cut, feel free to offer your pitch in the comments for feedback.

Again, guys, when you’re cold-querying people, a great movie-crossover pitch could be the difference between them requesting the script and not requesting it. So this is important!

We have some very movie-friendly ideas this month. Maybe more so than ever before in Logline Showdown. These ideas are big and they’re sexy.

As far as how you should vote, I want you to vote on the whole package! The logline should still be the focal point of your vote. But if a movie-crossover pitch helps elevate that logline, that should factor into your vote!

If you haven’t played Logline Showdown before, read all the entries below and then, in the comment section, vote for your favorite. The entry that gets the most votes receives a script review next Friday. If you have extra time, tell us why you voted and why you didn’t vote for the others.

You have until 11:59pm Pacific Time Monday Night to vote.

May the best logline win!!!

ENTRIES

Title: Recursion
Genre: Action/Fantasy
Logline:  A female reporter desperate to rescue her kidnapped friend from a Tijuana drug cartel, teams up with a mysterious man who claims to be stuck in a time-loop – where every day ends in his death.
Movie-Crossover: Sicario meets Edge of Tomorrow

Title: Goblin In Love
Genre: Family/Animation
Logline: A young goblin travels with his friends across a suburban fantasy world to meet the love of his life – a fairy who’s he only ever seen in one social media post.
Movie-Crossover: ONWARD for the TikTok generation.

Title: INHUMAN
Genre: Sci fi Horror
Logline: An estranged married couple get attacked by three psychotic men who claim the wife has been replaced with an alien clone and they must kill her to prove it…
Movie-Crossover: The Strangers meets Invasion of the Body Snatchers

Title: Lockdown at Hell High
Genre: Horror
Logline: Twenty years after a tragic shooting, a high school reopens with state-of-the-art security, only to find history repeating itself when students are “locked down” with a sadistic killer using the technology against them.
Movie-Crossover: Riverdale meets “Saw.

Title: ECSTATIC
Genre: Drug Dramedy
Logline: In 1985 Dallas, a young psychotherapist discovers a new drug that could be a life-saving treatment for PTSD, but she falls for the DEA Agent tasked with finding evidence to ban this abused club drug nicknamed “Ecstasy.”
Movie Crossover: What if TRAINSPOTTING partied with ERIN BROCKOVICH?

I said I would include one entry this week SOLELY on the movie-crossover pitch, regardless of the logline.  Here is that winner.  And to be honest, it wasn’t close!

Title: She’s Got Claws
Genre: SUPERNATURAL THRILLER
Logline: A young war widow awakens naked on an Alaskan military base and fights for survival as she’s hunted by her father’s vengeful soldiers after a whole platoon was ripped apart overnight.
Movie-Crossover: American Werewolf In London eats Memento

A reminder that you have until 10pm Pacific Time tonight to get your entries in for March Logline Showdown, aka “Movie Crossover Showdown.” If you need to know how to enter, here is the post that gives you the instructions!

Week 11 of the “2 Scripts in 2024” Challenge

As a reminder, we are writing a screenplay! That is correct. Over the first six months of the year, I am helping you write an entire screenplay. We are over halfway done. Don’t worry. If you missed out, you can go write your screenplay right now because I’ve included every article on the timeline right here.

Week 1 – Concept
Week 2 – Solidifying Your Concept
Week 3 – Building Your Characters
Week 4 – Outlining
Week 5 – The First 10 Pages
Week 6 – Inciting Incident
Week 7 – Turn Into 2nd Act
Week 8 – Fun and Games
Week 9 – Using Sequences to Tackle Your Second Act
Week 10 – The Midpoint

Today, we are taking on one of the least defined areas of the screenplay: The section of the screenplay that follows the midpoint. I believe “Save The Cat” calls this the “Bad Guys Close In” section. However, when I looked through a bunch of movies, I didn’t see a whole lot of bad guys closing in.

Instead, I saw one of three things happening. Either the characters chilled out, things ramped up, or we cut to subplots.

Let’s start with Zombieland. They finally get to California at the midpoint, which is a big accomplishment. The writers follow this by placing their four main characters at Bill Murray’s house and having them get to know each other. We get several scenes of the characters splitting up and chatting.

This happens in Leave The World Behind as well. We get the big Teslas Gone Wild midpoint scene, then we spend the night with everyone at the house. The dad gets to know the house owner’s daughter. And the mom gets to know the house owner. Each scene has a deeper dialogue-driven focus.

I get the sense that the writers of these movies know they’re going to ramp things up soon and build toward a rousing climax. So they treat this section as the “calm before the storm.” It’s the final attempt by the writer to do some real character work before the sh*t hits the fan.

The next option is to Ramp Up. This is the one I like best because it keeps the narrative moving and it focuses on the primary goal. In Back to the Future, the midpoint is Doc and Marty realizing, when they go to the high school, that Marty’s mom has fallen in love with him.

Notice how this gives us the opportunity to create an INTENSE GOAL that will be used to propel the story to the endpoint. The overarching goal in Back to the Future is for Marty to get back to the future. Duh. But now he can’t do that until he makes sure his mom falls in love with his dad as opposed to himself. THAT’S THE GOAL THAT GETS US TO THE GOAL.

So the very next scene after the midpoint is Marty approaching his dad at the cafeteria during lunch and trying to convince him to ask Lorraine to the dance. Notice how we’re jumping right back into the story after the midpoint. We’re not screwing around. We’re getting to the goal.

In my experience, the best screenplays are the ones where there isn’t a whole lot of dilly-dallying. Meaning, there aren’t a lot of scenes that aren’t pushing the story forward. When I look at Zombieland and Leave The World Behind, I find them both to be strong movies. But they are definitely not as good as they could be. And the reason for that is they have dilly-dallying scenes, scenes of the dad and the owner’s daughter smoking pot and discussing life (funny enough, Zombieland inserts a pot-smoking scene after the midpoint as well). Neither scene pushes anything forward. So why include it?

Whereas, with Back to the Future, which is arguably the tightest screenplay ever written, we see that there is zero dilly-dallying after the midpoint. We’re right back in the plot. And we’re back in it because they have a story to tell and they don’t have time to waste.

By the way, this is why, when you have plot issues later in your script, it’s usually because of mistakes you made earlier in the script. If you didn’t do a great job establishing a big goal with huge stakes and a lot of urgency, don’t be surprised when, later in your script, you’re struggling to figure out exactly what your characters need to do, to give those actions consequences, and to insert urgency.

Finally, you have subplots. All this option means is that, in stories where there are multiple plotlines going on separate from your main plot, this is a good time to cut to those subplots. You just showed us a major scene with your main characters via the midpoint. Give those characters a quick break to recharge and, in the meantime, get us up to date on the other storylines.

I suspect this is where Save The Cat’s “Bad Guys Close In” beat makes sense. Cause I pulled up Empire Strikes Back. The midpoint has Han Solo escaping an attack from an Imperial Star Destroyer. And then we cut to the main subplot, Darth Vader’s pursuit of them, and he angrily tells the ship’s captain to find Solo immediately.

I don’t remember exactly how No Country For Old Men was structured, but I would guess that that would also fall under “Bad Guys Close In.” We cut away from Llweyn Moss to see that Anton Chigurh is getting closer.

But you can also cut to other subplots. Jurassic Park actually does the opposite of Bad Guys Close In. Nedry (gotta love that name), the guy who steals the embryos, makes a run for it in his jeep, only to crash and get attacked by a mini-dinosaur. In that case, Bad Guys Run Away!

So there are plenty of options to work with here. It’s yet another reminder that screenplays are complex. There is no one-size-fits-all template. Nor should there be. Anyone But You is trying to do something different from The Beekeeper which is doing something different from American Fiction which is doing something different from Oppenheimer.

Despite that, I always find that it’s advantageous to have guidelines to work within. If you’re out there blind in the dark waving your hands around, it will show in the script. I read amateur scripts every single day and it’s one of the most common things I see. You can tell the writer isn’t sure where to go in the latter stages of their story.

I was just reading an amateur script the other day with this problem and the writer made up some side-quest that had no basis whatsoever in what had been set up previously. We do that when we don’t have a clear plan. No goals, no stakes, no urgency.

So figure out which of these options best fits YOUR script, and then have a plan. As long as you have a plan to keep pushing your story forward, you should be okay.

Once again, write 2 pages today, 2 pages tomorrow, 2 pages each Saturday and Sunday, 2 pages Monday, and then you get Tuesday and Wednesday to rewrite or catch up.

What are some of your strategies when writing directly after your midpoint?  Do you have a plan or do you just wing it?  Inquiring minds want to know!

Seeya next week when we take on pages 71-80.

Did Christopher Nolan hoodwink Hollywood?

Can you really call it a successful Oscars if no one got slapped?

I got thoughts.

I got opinions.

But I’m not going to be hating today. I’m going to be celebre-hating.

Oppenheimer won the two biggies – Best Picture and Best Director. But it says a lot that it didn’t win Best Screenplay.

Why is that?

Because the screenplay was baaaaaaaad. It was bad, folks. It was. Nobody really knows who Oppenheimer was after that movie. Nobody understands why there were 45 minutes of movie left after the film was over. The cutting back and forth between all the time-periods was clumsy and disjointed.

But it shows just how amazing of a director Nolan is in that he was able to overcome that to win Best Picture and Best Director. And I support those wins. There was no movie this year that looked better, that felt more authentic, that was better constructed, that had a better cast of actors, that felt like a moviegoing experience, than Oppenheimer.

But, dude, Nolan. Get yourself a screenwriter. If you do that, you could literally become the greatest filmmaker ever. Right now you are limiting yourself with your weak screenwriting.

Okay, onto the screenwriting categories.

Best Writing (Adapted Screenplay)
American Fiction (Written for the screen by Cord Jefferson)
Barbie (Written by Greta Gerwig & Noah Baumbach)
Oppenheimer (Written for the screen by Christopher Nolan)
Poor Things (Screenplay by Tony McNamara)
The Zone of Interest (Written by Jonathan Glazer)

Winner: American Fiction

I can’t count how many people have recommended this movie to me so I just started watching it last night and, WHOA! A little heads up there on the bummer of a first act climax would’ve been nice! The trailer promised a fun funny movie! Here they are killing people off. Sheesh. But I will continue watching tonight. I loved the opening scene in the classroom. It brilliantly went after the ridiculousness of woke culture. I’m assuming it’s going to keep doing that and, if so, expect a positive review.

Personally, I would’ve voted for either Barbie or Poor Things. You can’t leave 2023 without giving Barbie a major award. It’s ridiculous. The movie deserved it.  Either for the directing, which was amazing, or the writing, where they took way more creative risks than they’re getting credit for.

The thing I loved about Poor Things is that it not only used the most basic story template of them all – The Hero’s Journey – but it took a lot of risks as well. The father character was such a weirdo and unlike any other character in 2023. I would say it lost because nobody saw it. But nobody saw American Fiction either and it still won.  I suspect Poor Things was too weird to catch on with people.

Best Writing (Original Screenplay)
Anatomy of a Fall (Screenplay by Justine Triet and Arthur Harari)
The Holdovers (Written by David Hemingson)
Maestro (Written by Bradley Cooper & Josh Singer)
May December (Screenplay by Samy Burch; Story by Samy Burch & Alex Mechanik)
Past Lives (Written by Celine Song)

Winner: Anatomy of a Fall

The Original Screenplay category is always a bit of wildcard. That’s because most of the “serious” movies that Hollywood makes are adapted from something. If Hollywood makes an original movie with an original screenplay, it’s usually a genre film, like The Beekeeper. And we know they’re never going to celebrate one of those scripts at the Oscars. So we get this group of oddball contestants that always feels lacking on some level.

With all that said, I’m surprised that Anatomy of a Fall took down The Holdovers. The Holdovers was the favorite. It’s always a bit of a shock when a script that wasn’t even written in the English language wins Best Screenplay at the Oscars.

To be honest, I don’t know why this script won. Even those few people who saw and enjoyed the movie, if you asked them what they liked best about it, I’d be shocked if 1 out of 100 said, “the screenplay.” Most people would pick Sandra Huller’s performance.

I guess the script does keep you guessing. But any script that has a 100-page second act can f right off. I’m sorry, but seriously. Show some focus with what you’re trying to do, for God’s sakes. A 100-page second act screams, “I don’t know where I’m going so I’m just going to include it all.” And that’s how it felt. It wandered.

I still haven’t seen The Holdovers even though I’m one of the few people who has Peacock’s streaming service and therefore the film is free for me. As you know, I didn’t like an early draft of the script and even though you guys have told me that the shooting draft is vastly improved, it’s always hard for me to drum up motivation to see a movie where I disliked the script. Every once in a long while, the movie turns out great (Three Billboards Outside Ebbings Mississippi). But it’s usually impossible for the movie to be salvaged.

I’m sure I’ll check it out at some point.

As for the other major categories, I’m ecstatic that Cillian Murphy won over the thirstiest Oscar thirster in history, Bradley Cooper. If he would’ve won for that boring self-important piece of crap, I would’ve chosen violence.

I’m ecstatic that Emma Stone won for Poor Things. I thought she was amazing in that film. She had the single most interesting main character I’ve seen in a movie in over a decade. She holds nothing back in the movie. She’s funny. She’s weird. And I just respect any artist who takes a huge swing.

The one category where the Academy got it dead wrong was supporting actor. I can’t recite a single line Robert Downey Jr. said in Oppenheimer. I can’t recall a single memorable moment he was involved in. Of every actor who was in that film, I would say he was the 14th or 15th most memorable.

Ryan Gosling deserved to win this award. This speaks to a bigger question, possibly even a conspiracy. From the start of Awards season, the Oscars wanted nothing to do with Barbie. And I don’t know why. Barbie is not Transformers. It’s not mindless entertainment. It actually made you think. It’s a movie made by women celebrating women in an industry desperately trying to promote women.

And yet crickets for Barbie at the Oscars. I’m baffled by it. Does anybody have any theories as to why they’d turn their backs on the movie that’s most representative of what they’re trying to do? Is Margot Robbie secretly Scott Rudin behind the scenes?? What’s going on here! Tell me!

What are your 2024 Oscar hot takes?

Did anyone rob the Academy? Who didn’t win but should’ve? And, of course, I expect lots of comments telling me I’m wrong about Oppenheimer so I’m going to preemptively respond to them here. YOU’RE WRONG. It was a junk screenplay.

Happy Monday!