Is this the genre every writer should be writing in right now?
Genre: Action/2-Hander
Premise: A green FBI agent is sent to Miami to retrieve a criminal for prosecution. During the return trip, the fed and the thug each learn there’s more to the other than expected.
About: Fox bought this script back in 2005 as a vehicle (no pun intended) for Hugh Jackman. But it was not to be, as Jackman eventually backed out to do other projects. Screenwriter Dario Scardapane would go on to have a solid working career in Hollywood, working on The Punisher series and Tom Clancy’s Jack Ryan.
Writer: Dario Scardapane
Details: 108 pages
I don’t believe in luck insofar as it determines who “makes it” or not in the industry. If you have the talent, you will “make it.” However, where your career goes once you’re in the industry is a different beast.
I’ve seen so many people become big due to lucky timing or a lucky break. And then I’ve seen people miss out on that big opportunity because of elements outside of their control.
I was thinking of this today because I was reading an article in The Hollywood Reporter about Sydney Sweeney’s latest movie, Immaculate. I didn’t know this but Sweeney was on a show called Everything Sucks! on Netflix but it was surprisingly canceled after one year. It was a blow at the time for Sweeney. But guess what? It opened up the chance for her to be on Euphoria, the show that broke her out as an actress.
Think about that. If Everything Sucks! continued, it’s highly likely there would be no Sydney Sweeney mania right now. And that would make me, and a lot of red-blooded American men, very sad.
When I came across this script, I noticed that it originally had Hugh Jackman attached. But he would later leave the project. This happens all the time in Hollywood and the actor leaving the project drastically changes the paths of the writer who wrote the script. Had this been made, writer Dario Scardapane very well might be an A-list screenwriter.
As it stands, he’s done some TV and had a decent credit with the Liam Neeson thriller, Memory. But, he’s not John Spaiths.
By the way, Hugh Jackman had his own fortuitous lucky break. The original guy who was supposed to play Wolverine, Dougray Scott, couldn’t do it because of a scheduling conflict. Would Hugh Jackman have anywhere close to the career he has today if he hadn’t gotten Wolverine? Methinks no.
And it’s not that that Scott had a bad career. He’s been steadily working ever since then. He just doesn’t have 100 million in the bank.
Then again, maybe this script will tell us that there’s a reason Jackman left. Let’s find out for ourselves.
Antwan “The Swan” Carter is a gangster to the highest degree. He’s one of those dudes who’s spent just as much time in prison as outside of it. When we meet him, he’s trying to get the F out of Miami. But TSA at the airport notice blood on his shoes and start questioning him. He makes a run for it but they catch him and take him in.
Cut to New York where we meet uptight youngster FBI agent Miles Vreeland. Vreeland is shocked when he gets the orders from his boss to go down to Miami to pick Carter up. Usually, they’d send a senior officer. And the method of delivery is odd as well. They’re going to be taking the train (the ‘Fed-X’) instead of a plane.
Vreeland shows up with two US Marshalls, picks Carter up, and begins the delivery. Vreeland doesn’t like Carter. He challenges him on the fact that his MO for his crimes is to recruit 15 year old kids. That’s what led to Carter making a run for it. He and four kids robbed a Brinx truck but the robbery went sideways. All four of the kids were killed.
Just as the two finish talking about that, one of the Marshalls pulls a gun and starts shooting… AT VREELAND! WTF?? Vreeland and Carter improvise and take the guy down. But then the other Marshall comes in guns-a-blazing as well. This right after he sabotaged the train, which goes spinning off the track and crashing.
Once everything settles, some black ops dudes in Yukons storm into the train wreckage, ALSO SHOOTING at Vreeland. What’s going on here!!?? Vreeland and Carter make a run for it, hurtling into the forest. Carter keeps demanding that Carter free his handcuffs so he has a fighting chance but Vreeland says there’s no way I’m letting you free.
They make it to a store and Vreeland calls his boss to tell him what happened. His boss says not to worry about it. He’ll have men pick him up in 15 minutes. Hold tight. Except his men don’t pick him up. Those Yukons come back. That’s when Vreeland realized that this goes way deeper than he thought, and that, ironically, the only person he can trust right now is the killer he’s escorting. Will the two be able to work together and get out of this? Or are these forces too big to escape?
You know what I realized while reading this script?
The market is ripe for a 2-Hander. That’s when you have two people – a team if you will – leading your script in some sort of crime related storyline. This is a movie blueprint Hollywood has been printing money off of for 50+ years. But, for whatever reason, there hasn’t been a big one for a while now.
There are two main ways to break into Hollywood with a script. One is to write something completely new and fresh. The other is to figure out what successful genre is lying dormant at the moment and write a script in that genre. The 2-Hander is lying dormant right now. So, whoever comes up with a good one could have a sale on their hands.
One of the things I love best about the 2-Hander is when it incorporates the “reluctant team-up.” The good guy and the bad guy will often have to work together. And it’s just so much fun when that happens! And this script does a good job building that relationship. The key is, we have to like them together. And we definitely like these two together.
The script does get bumpy in places. I wasn’t exactly thrilled that the bad guys were Bolivians. Although I guess back in 2005, that choice would’ve been on brand. It’s funny how hard it’s become to come up with a country for villains these days. But this tells me that it’s always been a challenge.
Most of the story revolves around a plot that had Carter stealing this money and then hiding it. These bad guys seem to be after that money. Although for the majority of the movie, Carter keeps those details from Vreeland.
This script is an example of: if you get the main variables right, you’ve got a lot of leeway to make average choices. I personally push writers to make as many strong creative choices as they can. But you don’t have to if you get the main character right, his partner right, their relationship right, the mystery of why they’re being chased right. And all of that was solid. Which resulted in a solid script!
Which you can read for yourselves: Screenplay for Fed-X
[ ] What the hell did I just read?
[ ] wasn’t for me
[x] worth the read
[ ] impressive
[ ] genius
What I learned: An action scene is always more exciting when you can add a second front. Normally, in gunfight scenes, it’s our guys versus the bad guys. But in that early train-crash scene where Vreeland is taking on the fake US Marshalls, he’s also having to deal with Carter. A second front. A lot of times, writing is about building complications into scenarios that are too familiar. That’s what the “second front” does.
