The Black List is rigged. It’s time for Scriptshadow to un-rig it
Which Top 10 script is this?
As we all know, by this point, the Black List is rigged. This is not the creator, Franklin Leonard’s, fault. It’s just that the list has been around long enough that managers and agents have figured out how to manipulate it.
But here’s the thing. I don’t think the scripts on the list aren’t worthy. I just think they’re ranked incorrectly. If a prominent manager wants to get his client’s script near the top, he can get it there as long as he’s willing to do the work. This is what skews the Black List. And it’s why you need someone who goes in there, reads all the scripts, and figures out which ones are truly the best.
Since there’s a lot of confusion about if these are really the best of the best scripts, the answer is no. I can tell you that I’ve read five consultation scripts this year that would’ve made the top 10 of the Black List. But, for various reasons (i.e. 3 out of the 5 are repped writers who have no interest in blasting their scripts around town) the scripts won’t come to the attention of voters.
And then, of course, you have the unending list of professional screenwriters doing big-time assignment work that would blow every script on the 2023 Black List out of the water. But most of these scripts are kept under wraps and, therefore, never seen by Black List voters.
The Black List has become more a celebration of new screenwriters. Which I think is a good thing. But it also puts undue pressure on the list to deliver when, in actuality, the writers who made the list, aren’t ready to deliver. They’re new (relatively speaking). They’re still learning the craft. If we’re lucky, five of them come up with something brilliant.
Which leads us to today’s list. I’m re-ranking all of last year’s scripts so that you know what the TRUE best scripts on the list are. There are 18 scripts (out of 74) that will not be included on the list because I didn’t read them. They were scripts that, mostly, sounded like I wouldn’t enjoy them no matter how well they were written. However, if anybody has read any of these and believes I’m missing out, by all means, tell me in the comments section. I’ll read the script and, if necessary, change the rankings.
Those scripts are: Resurfaced (biopic), Dumb Blonde (biopic), Total Landscaping (2020 election), Cheat Day (flimsy premise), Going For Two (gay NFL QB falls for teacher), Popular (GOP strategist hero), An Oakland Holiday (princess at an Oakland H.S.), Better Luck Next Time (gender vs. gender), Jerry! (Biopic), The Homestead (never got to it but best-looking of these options), The Twelve Dancing Princesses (title alone kept me from this one), Caravan (demon in the Silk Road – could maybe be good), It’s Britney, B*tch (I mean, do I have to explain?), Wildfire (mute and a trans woman), Black Dogs (Led Zepplin heist – could be good), Eternity (felt like one of those aimless indie films), The Trap (twin trapeze artists), You’re My Best Friend (felt like a bad YA book).
Are we ready? Okay, good. To create some suspense, I’ll be starting from the bottom and moving all the way to the top.
56. A Guy Goes to Therapy by Shane Mack
Logline: When his girlfriend catches her boyfriend doing something unthinkable, she leaves him, forcing him to consider the unthinkable – therapy.
Votes: 19 (Top 10)
From Review: “If the main plot is something that can be a subplot in another movie, your concept probably isn’t big enough.”
55. Viva Mexico by Miguel Flatow
Logline: When a washed-up superhero gets betrayed by a Mexican government, he must lead a populist social movement to fight the Narcos, topple the government, and free the people.
Votes: 15 (Top 15)
From Review: “It wasn’t even clear, at the beginning, if John *was* a superhero or a guy wearing a suit pretending to be a superhero. And then when we do find out he’s a real superhero (he’s kind of a low-rent Captain America), we’re told that he only got half-a-dose of the super-serum. So he’s not a true superhero. And, also, I think his shield is the only thing that allows him to have his powers?”
54. The Seeker by Camrus Johnson
Logline: A childhood folktale comes to life when children of the neighborhood start to go missing after playing hide and seek.
Votes: 6 (Bottom 10)
From Review: “What do we have here that is in any way redeeming to Black List voters? This isn’t a marketable idea. It’s not a cool idea. It’s not a heady idea. It’s not a clever idea. It’s not written in a unique voice. The execution is okay but far from exceptional. Why would people vote for this?”
53. They Came From A Broken World by Vanessa Block
Logline: The year is 1955. The small town of Boon Falls has provided a local forest as refuge to aliens fleeing their war-torn planet. When Mia–young woman dealing with the trauma of her mother’s death–stumbles upon an Alien woman who needs her help, a series of haunting revelations in the refugee forest leads her to an unimaginable truth.
Votes: 14 votes (Top 20)
From Review: “The script tried to do too much. We’ve got the illegal alien issue (some people in town hate the aliens). We’ve got climate change (people escaping a world that’s falling apart). We’ve got racism (the backstory alludes to discrimination in the 50s). We’ve got sexism (the aliens are all women). I’m not going to lie. At a certain point, it felt like a Black List bingo card.”
52. Jambusters by Filipe Coutinho
Logline: A mystery about what paper jams can teach us about life. After an inexperienced detective starts investigating a death at the Paper Jam department of a major corporation on the verge of its centennial, she unwittingly embarks on a life-altering spiritual journey that unearths her small town’s dark secrets.
Votes: 17 (Top 10)
From Review: “In the end, though, this script makes you wade through so much text to get to the relevant plot points, that it violates one of the most important rules of screenwriting, which is that a script is supposed to entertain the reader. The second it crosses over into making them work, you’ve lost them.”
51. Baby Boom by Jack Waz
Logline: A married couple attending a gender reveal party are quickly informed that they must stop the reveal party at all costs… or the world will blow up.
Votes: 17 (Top 10)
From Review: “The script is written in a brisk effortless style, as every comedy should be. The structure is solid, as it’s divided into five sections, each with a big goal (prevent the world from blowing up). But for me, it’s more of a “smile” comedy than an “lol” comedy.”
Additional: The comedy with the most potential on the list and they botched it.
50. There You Are by Brooke Baker
Logline: When a non-confrontational playwright loses her engagement ring, she must travel through Italy to get it back with a man who was supposed to be just a one-night stand, discussing love and lying along the way.
Votes: 15 (Top 15)
From Review: “You can make the argument that this movie is exploring reality as opposed to the bubble gum version of relationships and dating. Sometimes, as human beings, we do dumb illogical s—t. Sleep with the wrong people. Hurt those we love. The problem is, the script doesn’t have the requisite touch required to hold up to this more complex view of humanity.”
49. I Love You Now And Forever by Robert Machoian
Logline: After exhausting all financial options to save their dying daughter, Frank and Abby are forced into a final act of desperation: rob a local bank.
Votes: 8 votes (bottom 50%)
From Review: “You need narratives that give your characters purposeful things to do throughout the movie. Not just during the big obvious set pieces.”
48. Craigshaven by Nicole Ramberg
Logline: A Wisconsin high school girl teams up with her friends to look for a ghost ship she believes is connected to her mother’s disappearance.
Votes: 6 votes (Bottom 10)
From Review: “But in being so hyper-focused on this ghost ship plotline, everything else falls by the wayside. Not just the characters but the plot. It’s too standard and basic. With screenwriting, you have to do it all. Or you at least have to try. From the concept to the voice to the characters to the storytelling to the dialogue to the relationships to the plot to the structure. You can’t half-ass any of those if you want to write a great script.”
47. The Sisters by Alexander Thompson
Logline: Twin sisters live in a commune where, once they hit puberty, one of the twins becomes a monster and must be killed. But when the twins learn that their community is keeping big secrets from them, they make a run for it.
Votes: 9 (Lower middle of the pack)
From Review: “The YA genre has always been underwhelming. Anyone could come up with one of these concepts in thirty seconds. Here, I’ll come up with one right now. Children are all raised in a remote commune. At 10, all girls become vampires and all guys get telepathy. Boom, there’s a YA concept for anyone who wants it.”
46. Pizza Girl by Jean Kyoung Frazier
Logline: A pregnant pizza delivery girl becomes infatuated with a customer, a mother desperately trying to raise a son on her own.
Votes: 21 (Top 5)
From Review: “Like a lot of Black List scripts, Pizza Girl has some strong pieces to it. But the overall experience feels uneven and too depressing. I think I understood what the writer was trying to do but was just never able to get past that down feeling the story gave me.”
45. Oh The Humanity by Gillian Weeks
Logline: A dark comedy about the Hindenburg Disaster; or, the mostly true story about one of the biggest f—kups in history, the a—holes who tried to cover it up, and the female gossip reporter who made some Nazis very angry.
Votes: 15 (top 15)
From Review: “I wouldn’t say this was the most frustrating script I’ve read all year. But it was up there. There was a ton going on and I was always playing catch-up, trying to figure out the tone, trying to figure out the type of movie, trying to remember who was who and what they wanted. Trying to figure out who the heck the main character was.”
44. Marriage Bracket by Liv Auerbach & Daisygreen Stenhouse
Logline: Ten years after a group of girlfriends bet on which of them would be the last to get married, their adult lives and relationships are completely upended when they discover the $80 they drunkenly invested in Bitcoin
Votes: 6 (Bottom 10)
From Review: “I’m fine with a little sloppiness in comedies. It can actually help the comedy at times. But if I don’t even believe that what’s happening would happen, it’s hard for me to invest emotionally. And if I’m not invested emotionally, it’s hard for me to laugh. I’ll chuckle. I’ll have a few of those surface-level laughs. But for those deep uncontrollable laughs, the screws have to be way tighter than they are here.”
43. It’s a Wonderful Story by Alexandra Tran
Logline: In the aftermath of WWII, a traumatized Frank Capra and Jimmy Stewart use the making of IT’S A WONDERFUL LIFE to attempt to find a way back into normalcy.
Votes: 9 votes (middle of the pack)
From Review: “I thought the script was going to do something clever like cover the production of It’s a Wonderful Life in a way that semi-mirrored the actual film. For example, what if James Stewart was feeling similar things about his own existence in relation to the fictional character he played? What does this world look like if James Stewart was never born? Fun stuff like that. But it’s more of this traditional biopic.”
42. Jingle Bell Heist by Abby McDonald
Logline: At the height of the holiday season, two strangers team up to rob one of New York’s most famous department stores while accidentally falling in love.
Votes: 12 votes (upper middle of the pack)
From Review: “My advice if you’re going to write a heist screenplay is to stay away from a straight, sexy thriller, unless you’re one of the best dialogue writers in the world. Because these movies are all about the banter between the two main characters, as well as the sexual tension underneath that banter.”
41. Fog of War by Peter Haig
Logline: When a retired war journalist returns to the outpost where her son was stationed to investigate the mysterious circumstances surrounding his death, she uncovers unspeakable horrors.
Votes: 12 votes (upper middle of the pack)
From Review: “I struggled with the storytelling here. The script relied too heavily on “crazy stuff happens” moments. Monkey attacks, 1900s era soldiers, goats voluntarily committing suicide, characters going insane. I’m all for something crazy happening in a script. It can be fun. I just felt there was an over-reliance on it.”
40. Pop by James Morosini
Logline: A 13 year-old boy blackmails his favorite pop star into being his best friend.
Votes: 8 votes (bottom 50%)
From Review: “The screenplay feels rushed. The writer never commits to any details to make me believe this is a real pop star. If you’re covering a specific subject matter, you have to give us AT LEAST ONE THING that we don’t know. In one of my favorite movies of the year, Blackberry, we get this early scene in the boardroom that goes into highly specific territory about how the Blackberry works. That helps sell us on the world, which, in turn, pulls us in. If anything, I got the opposite impression from “Pop.” Alice sells CDs at her concert! Because we all know those Gen Z 15 and 16 year olds love CDs. It’s just as important to them as improving their laserdisc collection.”
39. Match Cut by Will Lowell
Logline: A stunt man on location in Italy is mistaken for a famous assassin who just tried to take out one of the country’s biggest businessman. The businessman puts his entire financial weight behind finding and killing the “assassin.”
Votes: 11 votes (middle of the pack)
From Review: “Take the opening scene here. It’s as assassination scene. It’s well written. It’s paced well. It’s described well. There’s a little bit of suspense. It has an emotional moment between father and son. But I have read, literally, one thousand scenes just like it.”
38. Break Point by Zachary Joel Johnson
Logline: Courted by colleges and sponsors alike, a burnt-out tennis prodigy fights to maintain dominance against her Academy rival as she hurtles toward the existential decision of turning Pro–a choice that will force her to double down on her dream or walk away from the future she’s fought for.
Votes: 7 votes (Bottom 20)
From Review: “You need to create stakes that hold up in the real world. For example, Faheema decides she’s going to play the Nationals in the hopes of winning in order to double her contract offer from Prince. But what does that really mean? She’ll make 160 thousand dollars instead of 80 thousand. You have to think about these things from the perspective of the reader. Is the reader really going to say, “Oh man! I wasn’t interested when she was only going to make 80 grand. But now that she’s going to get 160 grand?? I’m all in!”
37. Life of the Party by Julie Mandel Folly & Hannah Murphy
Logline: Two teenage feminists struggle to create the perfect boyfriend, only to watch their experiment deteriorate as he succumbs to the ultimate perpetrator of casual high school misogyny: the football team.
Votes: 7 (Bottom 20)
From Review: “I just couldn’t get past all the technical errors, like the motivation, character inconsistency, the writers making things too easy for our heroes.”
36. The Boy Houdini by Matthew Tennant
Logline: When aspiring magician, Harry Houdini, discovers a mysterious puzzle-box, he must use his talent for illusion and escape to unlock the box’s powerful secrets and keep it out of the hands of a vengeful sorcerer.
Votes: 12 (upper middle of the pack)
From Review: “You can’t spell “movie” without “move.” A movie’s gotta move. A side quest THINKS it’s moving. It creates the ILLUSION of moving since your characters are going after something. But the main plot is stalled and therefore we feel stalled.”
35. Mega Action Hit by Sean Tidwell
Logline: After Hollywood’s leading action star hits his head on set and wakes up thinking he’s a real-life action hero, he embarks on an international mission to track down a real stolen nuke before it’s too late.
Votes: 11 (middle of the pack)
From Review: “Mega Action Hit is fun. But like a lot of these scripts, the fun is too empty. It’s not genuine fun. It’s the kind of fun you have passively watching TV while messing around on your computer. In other words, there’s not enough here for me to endorse it.”
34. Gather the Ashes by Vikash Shankar
Logline: Two young Indian brothers living in England head back to their dying grandmother’s home in a remote part of India only to learn that her house may be haunted.
Votes: 7 (Bottom 20)
From Review: “If you’re stuck in one location – which often happens with haunted house scripts – you need to move your plots along quicker because we’re going to get bored faster in contained locations. Characters sitting around is script ambien. So you need your plot to offset that.”
33. Goat by Zack Akers & Skip Bronkie
Logline: A promising first-round draft pick is invited to train at the private compound of the team’s legendary but aging quarterback. Over one week, the rising star witnesses the horrific lengths his hero will go to to stay at the top of his game.
Votes: 16 (Top 15)
From Review: “The script has its charms. I love the spec-y nature of it. Contained time frame. Low character count. Organic heavy conflict between the leads. Urgency. And the genre element makes it easier to sell. I was into all that. But the execution felt too basic and repetitive. Very repetitive.”
32. Weary Ride The Belmonts by Josh Corbin
Logline: After staging his death many years ago, an aging gunslinger is forced to reunite with his outlaw daughter during the dying days of the west.
Votes: 8 (low bottom half)
From Review: “There’s still 40 pages remaining in the script and we’re left to wonder, “Why are we still here? What’s left to figure out?” I guess there are some questions that need answering regarding why Ophelia hates her dad. But that’s the kind of question you want piggybacking on top of a bigger story goal. And you just ended your story goal.”
31. Undo by Will Simmons
Logline: A down-on-his-luck former getaway driver comes into possession of a mysterious watch that allows the user to go back in time by one minute. As he starts to uncover its uses and gets pulled into one last heist by his former crew, a dangerous group after the technology gets on his tail and will stop at nothing to get the watch back.
Votes: 8 (low bottom half)
From Review: “Let me think out loud here for a second. A minute ago, Benji was worried about some second-tier street thug maybe following Vince and figuring out where Benji lives. But Benji has no problems with a DEAD KGB AGENT IN HIS HOME?????!!! I’m thinking on the scale of “this is a problem,” that’s about a million times worse than a Latin King.”
30. Americano by Nico Bellamy & Chase Pestano
Logline: An everyday guy who accidentally starts working as a barista inside the CIA headquarters building gets lured into a spy mission by a beautiful secret agent, known only to him as Carmel Machiato.
Votes: 12 (upper middle of the pack)
From Review: “I like “in over your head” comedy. You risk a little bit when you make your hero incompetent. If a protagonist is too dumb or too idiotic, the reader can rebel against them. Hubie Halloween comes to mind. But as long as he’s funny, we’ll forgive a lot of that incompetance.”
29. Who Made The Potato Salad? By Kyle Drew
Logline: A family’s Christmas dinner goes awry when a xenomorphic demon starts to duplicate and imitate each member of the family. What does it want? To show them their greatest fears.
Votes: 10 (lower middle of pack)
From Review: “I was ready to tap out after the first act. There were a lot of character introductions. A lot of dialogue that, because there was so much setup, was boring to read. I was worried this was going to be one of those scripts where we sit at a table the whole time and engage in endless dialogue. But then Bryan commits suicide. Which is followed by him coming back to life. And, all of a sudden, I found myself turning the pages with more energy.”
28. Let’s go Again by Colin Bannon
Logline: When her domineering director makes her film the same scene 148 times on the final night of an exhausting shoot, actress Annie Long must fight to keep her own sanity as she tries to decipher what is real, and what is part of his twisted game.
Votes: 13 (upper middle of pack)
From Review: “I’m, self-admittedly, not a fan of descent-into-madness screenplays for one simple reason. The screenwriter never gets the line right between keeping the script understandable and the story crazy. They always bring the craziness and messiness into the writing itself so we’re not sure what’s going on. These scripts have to be understandable even if what’s going on in the story isn’t supposed to be understood. That’s a hard balance for even experienced writers to master. While Bannon’s tackling of the problem isn’t perfect, he does a pretty good job.”
27. What We Become by Amy Jo Johnson
Logline: A successful author/wife/mother plans a trip to a bucolic island to crack her next book and finds herself in a surprising situation.
Votes: 10 (lower middle of the pack)
From Review: “Sex scenes are tricky, to shoot as well as to write. Because if you’re too soft, they’re boring. If they’re too hard, they become exploitative and overwhelm the moment, pulling the reader out of the story. I thought Johnson wrote these perfectly. The scenes are sexy, slightly original, occasionally push the boundaries, and most importantly, remain authentic.”
26. Vitus by Julian Wayser
Logline: Back in 1518, there was an infamous real-life “dancing plague” that took over a town and proceeded to kill dozens of people. To this day, there is no consensus on what happened.
Votes: 10 (lower middle of the pack)
From Review: “If you are going to write a story that moves between characters instead of stays with a main character, you have to be GREAT at creating memorable characters in a short period of time.”
25. Chatter by Chris Grillot
Logline: A drug addict returning from rehab kidnaps her daughter from her father then tries to skip town, only to end up at an old BnB chased by an evil tooth fairy determined to take her daughter from her.
Votes: 6 (Bottom 10)
From Review: “With that said, there’s a teensy bit more good to Chatter than bad. Like I always say, get the main characters right and that will act as deodorant for many of your script’s weaknesses. I felt that Grillot got the characters of Ceilia and Imani right. And then I always love when writers take a goofy idea and treat it really seriously. It always creates an unexpected tone.”
24. The Midnight Pool by Jonathan Easley
Logline: Burdened by the loss of his wife to a suicide cult, an embittered investigative journalist infiltrates an elite secret society, only to find something far more sinister.
Votes: 14 (Top 20)
From Review: “If you like absurdist stuff – David Lynch and those types of movies – you might dig this. It certainly has its charms. It just gets too messy.”
23. Court 17 by Elad Ziv (no review)
Logline: An over-the-hill tennis pro, trying to salvage her career, finds herself stuck playing the first round of the US Open over and over again against one of the top players in the world. The only way to stop the loop is to win the match, a seemingly impossible task due to how overmatched she is.
Votes: 22 (top 2)
Thoughts: I didn’t review this one because, as some of you know, I worked extensively with the writer on it. I couldn’t review it objectively no matter how hard I tried. Plus, when you work on a script, you only see the things that are wrong as opposed to what’s right. I did read the new draft though and I thought it was pretty good. Elad took the script in some new directions. But I can’t get over the fact that I thought this could be great. To me, it wasn’t just about a tennis match. It was a metaphor for life. Every day you keep getting knocked down and you have to get back up and keep fighting or give up. That’s what I wanted to capture in the script and I don’t think we ever got there.
22. Pure by Catherine Schetina
Logline: A young woman obsessed with eating healthy becomes convinced that all the food she puts in her body is rotting, leading to her having a meltdown at her sister’s wedding.
Votes: 25 (number 1 script)
From Review: “I like creepy obsession stories. We all feel like we’re close to being one of these people. We all have our unique obsessions. What would it take for them to become a legit medical condition? The line between the two is probably a lot smaller than we think.”
21. White Mountains by Becky Leigh & Mario Kyprianou
Logline: The famous 1961 UFO case of Betty and Barney Hill, an interracial couple who had a close encounter of the 4th kind with aliens on a remote highway.
Votes: 17 (Top 10)
From Review: “It’s a solid script, especially if you like this subject matter. I would’ve preferred more UFO geekery in the end than social commentary but that’s just me.”
20. Pikesville Sweep by Brendan McMugh
Logline: After a young, newly widowed janitor in a small mining village is unexpectedly elected Mayor, she navigates a new relationship with a mysterious man from the city and tries to determine how to use her new position of power to confront the corruption that has plagued the town for years.
Votes: 13 (Upper middle of the pack)
From Review: “Main character was great. Villain was great. Any time those two were in a scene together, I was on the edge of my seat. But nothing else in the script worked, unfortunately. So I can’t endorse this.”
19. The Demolition Expert by Colin Bannon
Logline: Blasting out of prison after being double-crossed by the Mastermind of a heist, a Demolition Expert uses his genius with explosives to enact revenge on the Caper Crew who set him up while simultaneously picking up the pieces of his personal life.
Votes: 8 (lower middle of the pack)
From Review: “This is clearly Bannon’s modern-day take on Speed and it’s probably how a modern-day version of Speed would look like. There wouldn’t just be one scenario (a bus that couldn’t drop below 50 mph). The social media generation needs more stimuli, which is what The Demolition Expert gives you. It entertains you with multiple bomb situations.”
18. The House in the Crooked Forest by Ian Shorr
Logline: A mother and her young son fleeing Nazi-occupied Poland are forced to take shelter from a blizzard in an isolated manor, where they discover the Nazis may be the least of their worries.
Votes: 10 (Lower middle of the pack)
From Review: You know what this script reminded me of? Barbarian. It’s like a 1942 World War 2 version of Barbarian, with its horror waiting in the innards of the house and its weird monsters waiting to make mincemeat out of the home’s guests. I could totally see Craig Zegger directing this.
17. Ravenswood by Evan Enderle
Logline: To save her friend, a maid in a decaying manor must unravel the secrets of its inhabitants while confronting spirits, her own terrifying abilities, and the very real horrors of Depression-era America lurking outside the door.
Votes: 10 (lower middle of the pack)
From Review: “This is DEFINITELY one of the better written scripts on the Black List. The writing is simple, descriptive, and, most importantly for a horror script, haunting. It feels professional right from the bump.”
16. Subversion by Andrew Ferguson
Logline: When her family is abducted, a disgraced submariner must pilot a narco submarine to its destination in less than eight hours or her husband and daughter will be killed.
Votes: 11 (middle of the pack)
From Review: “You wouldn’t be wrong to call this “Die Hard on a sub.” In fact, if the lead character was a 40 year old man and this spec was written in 1994 as opposed to 2023, I have no doubt it would’ve sold for 1.5 million dollars.”
15. Semper Maternus by Laura Kosann
Logline: On a private island off San Francisco, a nanny goes to work for a mother who is one of America’s most powerful tech entrepreneurs. Things slowly begin to devolve as the mother’s hyper-monitoring and surveillance become suffocating.
Votes: 11 (middle of the pack)
From Review: “I have to say, I LOOVVVEED the first half of this script. It was everything I wanted my contained thriller on an island screenplay to be. It was very much a female version of Ex Machina. I’m sure that was a big inspiration for Kossan.”
14. 42.6 Years by Seth Reiss
Logline: After waking up from a failed experimental lifesaving procedure in which he was cryogenically frozen for 42.6 years, a young man realizes he wants his ex-girlfriend back. He’ll have to overcome the fact that while he hasn’t aged a day, she’s lived an entire life without him.
Votes: 7 (Bottom 20)
From Review: “It was probably inevitable that I would like 42.6 years seeing as it nails one of my concept prerequisites: whatever genre you write in, come up with an idea that allows you to explore it from a fresh angle. Here, we have a romantic comedy whose premise sets up a scenario whereby a 30-something man is dating a 70-something woman.”
13. Below by Geoff Tock & Greg Weidman
Logline: A lonely bounty hunter trying to improve his life goes around LA killing secret monsters hiding inside human bodies. His job gets a lot more complicated when he’s forced to team up with his first partner.
Votes: 6 (bottom 10)
From Review: “Something happens to this script when Boxer (the older female co-lead) arrives. Because, before Boxer, this was a cold sad depressing world. She then comes in with this enthusiasm that not only gives Our Man (the hero) hope – it gives US hope! I loved that she was older, which is a different kind of dynamic than we’re used to with these pairings. I loved that all she wanted to do was be friends with Boxer. And she wouldn’t let him off the friend hook.”
12. Colors of Authority by Kevin Sheridan
Logline: Based on a true story, a young Los Angeles Sheriff’s dream job sours when he realizes that the department he serves in is mired in corruption and a systemic culture of moral depravity. Based on a true story.
Votes: 14 (upper middle of the pack)
From Review: “I would be shocked if this didn’t become a movie with a big director and some heavy-hitting actors. It’s got that “Departed” aroma wafting off of it. And Kevin is really good at placing his hero in these impossible-to-navigate situations.”
11. Ripple by Max Taxe
Logline: A relationship is put to the ultimate test when time ripples keep reinventing one of the partners, forcing the relationship to begin again… and again… and again… and again… and again…
Votes: 7 (Bottom 20)
From Review: “Once we’re in the throes of over a hundred ripples, we start to feel the desperation of Miles, as well as the realization that he may have to come to terms with letting Sadie go.”
10. Madden by Cambron Clark
Logline: After being forced into retirement by the Oakland Raiders, fiery former NFL head coach John Madden teams up with a mild-mannered Harvard programmer to rewrite his fading legacy by building the world’s first football video game. Based on a true story.
Votes: 19 (Top 10)
From Review: “That’s when this script shined the brightest – when Madden was in the room with these dorks, who were all way more interested in Klorgan the Elf than an option shovel pass, trying to find a common language to get this game completed.”
9. Beachwood by Briggs & Wes Watkins
Logline: Shunned by elite society as a member of the gig economy, a sociopathic dog walker infiltrates an exclusive L.A. community with designs of reaching the top of the neighborhood’s social ladder.
Votes: 20 (Top 5)
From Review: This script is the most unpredictable script in the Top 10 of the Black List. It’s weird. It’s fun. Even though it has problems, it does leave an impression on you.
8. Sang Froid by Michael Basha
Logline: After a botched delivery of fresh blood, a world weary vampire and a pregnant nurse team up to rob a hospital of their supply.
Votes: 18
From Review: Sang Froid is the unofficial “grown up” sequel to Let the Right One In. It has that same tone but it feels more adult. I thought it was great. And I think it’s an awesome example of how to write a spec screenplay. A few characters. Sparse description. Keep the plot moving. This is what all of you should be doing!
7. Pumping Black by Haley Bartels
Logline: A desperate cyclist and his charismatic new team doctor concoct a dangerous training program in order to win the Tour de France. But as the race progresses and jealous teammates, suspicious authorities, and the racer’s own paranoia close in, they must take increasingly dark measures to protect both his secret and his lead.
Votes: 22 (Top 5)
From Review: “I love stuff like this. I love when you add multiple consequences and those additional consequences get bigger each time. At first, it’s just getting kicked off the team. Then, it’s possibly getting caught by the doping federation. Then, it’s death!”
6. Black Kite by Dan Bulla
Logline: After a devastating wildfire wipes out a small California town, a teenage girl is missing and presumed dead. A year later, an obsessive mother and cynical arson investigator begin to suspect that she’s still alive…and in the clutches of a predator.
Votes: 6 (Bottom 10)
From Review: “I thought I was on page 60 and it turned out I was on page 85! Usually, it’s the opposite. I think I’m on page 60 and I’m on page 20. That’s screenwriting code for: this script was awesome.”
5. Wild by Michael Burgner
Logline: A werewolf living on a remote farm with her older sister takes in a thief on the run just 72 hours before the next full moon.
Votes: 13 (upper middle of pack)
From Review: “We’ve all heard of the “Meet Cute.” But how much more interesting is it when your male and female leads are introduced via a “Meet Mean?” Liz drives up to Nick, asks him a few questions, lets him know there’s no way she’s letting him in her car, then drives off. I find that WAY MORE interesting than if they had an instant connection.”
4. The Pack by Rose Gilroy
Logline: A documentary crew in contention at the Emmys for their film about wild Alaskan wolves is hiding several big secrets about their troubled 3 month shoot.
Votes: 10 (middle of the pack)
From Review: “When it comes to mysteries, nothing really matters unless the big reveal is great. But The Pack taught me something new about reveals. It doesn’t have a show-stopper “Sixth Sense” reveal. The reveal is character-driven. Which actually makes it even more impactful.”
3. Himbo by Jason Hellerman
Logline: A male stripper in Arizona who’s sleeping with his boss’s wife is propositioned by her to kill her hubby and run away together but things get complicated when they learn about the boss’s improbable money-making venture.
Votes: 7 votes (bottom 20)
From Review: “I already liked this script. But the second this random gold cave entered the equation, I loved it. I have never encountered something like that in a script like this before. Getting a WTF moment into your script that feels believable yet not too random is incredibly challenging. But when you nail it, like Himbo does, it takes your script up to a whole new level.”
2. Clementine by David L. Williams (newsletter review – to sign up for my newsletter, e-mail me at carsonreeves1@gmail.com)
Logline: Set in real time, a Colombian mother barely escapes a pawn shop shootout and goes on the run from her violent ex-husband, a terrifying mob boss, and a bloodthirsty hitwoman sent to collect an overdue debt, all while trying to keep her diabetic daughter safe.
Votes: 12 (upper middle of pack)
From Review: “The script is just freaking RELENTLESS.”
1.Dying for You by Travis Braun
Logline: A low-level worker on a spaceship run by a dark god must steal the most powerful weapon in the universe to save his workplace crush.
Votes: 18 (Top 10)
Thoughts: Wow! Wow wow wow wow wow. How good was this script? It’s been an entire year and I STILL remember it better than any other script on the list, even some scripts I read as little as two weeks ago. It’s so funny. The tone is perfect. The story is fun. The world-building is great. I don’t know how to describe it. It’s like The Princess Bride but set 200 years later in space and everyone is a lot cooler. Whichever young actors sign on to this movie are going to become superstars. No script made me feel better than this one. Wow!
If I’m being honest, there are only six scripts that I would say every screenwriter should read from this list. Those are the top 6 from my rankings. Every script below that feels more and more amateurish. They still have good moments. But they all have issues. The difference with the top 6 is that the stories are so compelling, you get lost in them and forget you’re reading a script. That’s the true mark of a great script – when the reader is no longer aware they’re reading it.
Congratulations to the biggest riser, Black Kite, which crawled out of the bottom of the heap to get into the Top 5. And also, Himbo, which was in the bottom 20 and finished in the Top 5. Biggest faller was A Guy Goes to Therapy. Jambusters and Baby Boom also faltered. Make sure to share your favorite scripts from the list in the comments section. Also, if there are any scripts I haven’t read yet that you thought were great, let me know!
