Genre: Action/Fantasy
Premise: A combat veteran fights to keep his inexperienced squad alive in the remote Scottish Highlands as they’re hunted by descendants of a Celtic Demigod.
Why You Should Read: I’ll let the logline speak for itself, either it’s your bag or not ;)…. Comparisons: Dog Soldiers/Wickerman/Southern Comfort.
Writer: B. Jack Azadi
Details: 97 pages

I LOVE this setup. I love anything where a group of tough dudes try to take down a supernatural something-or-other. It’s why I loved Aliens. It’s why I loved Predator. It’s why I liked Pitch Black. There’s something about that moment where they realize they’re vastly overmatched that gets me every time.

Surprisingly, these movies have fallen out of favor the last couple of decades. I’m not sure why but I suspect it’s because there were a bunch of Aliens clones that kept coming out summer after summer that were horrible. That and the fact that teams in camouflage have been replaced by teams in capes. The movie that probably sunk them for good was 1998’s Deep Rising. God was that movie bad. But I still think this is a winning formula when done well. Which is why I’m excited to read The Last Scion.

Let’s take a look!

A Scottish military unit has gone missing. So it’s up to a new unit, led by Lieutenant Greystone, to head up into the Scottish Highlands to find out what happened to them. Greystone will be accompanied by combat vet Sergeant Jackson, mysterious intelligence official Lieutenant Parker (the lone female on the team), a tough dude named Paddy, and roughly ten more men.

The team heads up to where the missing unit was last spotted and they find their first clue – a dead soldier’s body whose face has been eaten off. At this point, they’re operating on the thesis that some sort of animal attacked the team. And when they see some overgrown wolves scurrying about, they figure they’ve got their “man.”

But then, when everyone is hanging out at camp, a freaking axe comes flying out of nowhere and lodges itself in Greystone’s face. The soldiers go nuts, busting out their guns and firing in every direction. After everyone settles down, they construct a new plan: GO BACK DOWN THE MOUNTAIN AS FAR AWAY FROM THIS PLACE AS POSSIBLE.

Except it’s not going to be that easy. After a nice old lady kills one of their soldiers, the crew asks Parker what she knows. She confesses that they might be up against Celtic warriors who have kept living up here for centuries and they may even be stronger than average men. No sooner than that analysis is dropped, Parker, Paddy, and Jackson are kidnapped and brought to the Celtic village. Once they realize they’re going to be slaughtered, their final plan is formed: ESCAPE AT ALL COSTS.

For obvious reasons, I was hyper-focused on the first act of The Last Scion, which makes some pretty large blunders that send ripples throughout the rest of the screenplay. Let’s take a look at these trouble spots.

The first issue is the teaser. The teaser takes place 10 years ago. We follow an injured female soldier in the Western Mountains of Scotland as she runs from something. We see her run, we see her run, we see her run. She falls. A wolf emerges, grabs her, drags her off-screen. END OF TEASER.

Now you might say, “What’s wrong with this teaser, Carson? You’ve got an injured woman. She’s running. Something’s chasing her. There’s a lot of excitement going on. Isn’t that what you want?”

No.

Well, yes. It’s great to have a life or death situation in a teaser. But if all you’re showing us is generic imagery (a woman running, a woman falling, something pulling her away), it doesn’t register at all. It feels like every other version of this scene ever. You have to find a way to make it different, like in “It Follows” where a woman is running away from seemingly nobody. Or you have to throw some reveal in there that turns the scene upside-down. Like in Halloween where, after we witness this brutal murder in POV, we reverse to see the mask taken off and it’s a ten year old boy.

A garden variety action sequence is no better than no action at all.

But the much bigger faux-pas of The Last Scion is the character introductions. The character introductions were so restrained and/or minimal that I didn’t even know who the hero was. I assumed it was Parker, since she was the outsider. Let’s check out her introductory scene:

Is this the opening of an exciting character you want to get to know better? All she does is sit in a chair and answer questions. That’s not how any major character in your script should be introduced. Introduce them with panache. Show us why they’re cool, unique, dangerous, exciting, interesting, mysterious, ANYTHING. Anything more than “Answers Questions Woman.”

The final three characters who survive in the script are Parker, Paddy, and Jackson. Let’s check out how Paddy and Jackson are introduced…

The second introduction at least tells us a little bit about Jackson. But it’s not a strong introduction by any means. You have to look for visual and active ways to make a character stand out so the audience knows: THIS PERSON IS IMPORTANT. THIS PERSON IS COOL. Cause if they’re not cool, we’re not paying attention to them. And that was a big issue here. A dozen characters were introduced and I didn’t know who the main three I was supposed to be focused on were until page 80. That’s specifically because of the poor introductions.

This is a major lesson I need to get across to you guys. All this stuff I’m teaching you about the first act isn’t just about the first act. It’s about the whole script. Because if you’re not doing certain things right in the first act, it reverberates throughout the rest of the story.

In my latest newsletter, I talk about Richter scale moments, moments in the screenplay that shake the ground to such a degree that the reader can’t help but get excited to read on. I didn’t see enough of those here. For example, we build up Parker as this big mystery character, to the point where she barely speaks. We occasionally see her sneak away and send a text to someone. So we’re expecting a big reveal with her, a Richter scale worthy moment. But when they finally confront Parker about her secret texting, she comes clean, explaining that they’re up against possibly super-strong Celtic warriors – something we’d pretty much figured out on our own already.

When you have a reveal scene, it needs to actually reveal something. It can’t reveal 15% more than what we already know. Especially in a movie like this. The reveal needs to shake the very foundation we’re standing on.

My favorite part of The Last Scion is when they’re captured and taken back to the village because I not only felt like they were in serious danger, but this place was so weird and unpredictable that you got the sense anything could happen. There’s a moment where the Celtics nail a soldier to a cross, like Jesus, stab him to death, and then the Celtic children dance in the dying soldier’s blood as it sprays all over them.

Unpleasant image? Sure. But shocking? Yes. And this script needed a lot more of that.

If I were producing this script, the first thing I would do is sit down with Azadi and figure out who the hero was. Cause right now, it’s not clear. Then I would spend the next three hours brainstorming an introductory scene for that character that audiences would remember for the rest of their lives. That doesn’t mean he has to outrun boulders. You can make a big impact in a small setting. Go watch Anton Chigurh’s opening scene in No Country for Old Men to see how. But we need to make this guy badass and we need to make it clear he’s running the show. Cause I had no idea who was running the show for three-quarters of the script.

Honestly, that’s going to solve a lot of the script’s problems. From there, you need to create bigger Richter scale moments. The bar isn’t three feet off the ground. The bar is three miles in the sky. Don’t come with your ‘okay’ stuff. Come with the stuff that’s going to get people talking for years once they see your movie.

Cause premises like this are perfect for movies. So the potential is there. But this feels like it’s 4-5 drafts from reaching that potential.

Script Link: The Last Scion

[ ] What the hell did I just read?
[x] wasn’t for me
[ ] worth the read
[ ] impressive
[ ] genius

What I learned: With scripts like this that have a ton of characters introduced up front, you need to dedicate an entire week of your prep JUST ON COMING UP WITH CHARACTER NAMES. Make sure every name is distinctive, memorable, and represents the character in question. I remembered, maybe, one quarter of the soldiers here because there were simply too many of them.

Today we discuss setting up your hero’s life, which will have an enormous effect on how much we care about them during the movie.

Day 1: Writing a Teaser
Day 2: Introducing Your Hero

Now that we’ve discussed introducing your hero, we must discuss introducing their life.

There’s a specific reason for this. When you reach the second act, your hero is going to be entering the “adventure” world. For a movie like The Matrix that will mean a computer simulated kung-fu reality brimming with reckless gunslinging and killing. For a movie like Neighbors, it will mean a world of keg-stands and bongs, sexual experimentation and endless partying. In order for the uniqueness of these worlds to register, you must contrast them against the mundane ordinary world your hero starts in.

Setting up your hero’s world will consist of three primary things:

1. Their job
2. Their family
3. Their social life (relationships and friends)

Job – A person’s job takes up half their life. So it’s a huge part of a character’s identity. You can convey so much about them by showing just one scene at work. For example, if your character is a lowly office worker at a giant company like Amazon, you can convey that they’re just a cog in the machine, a number, lonely and unimportant. Conversely, if they’re the CEO of that same company, you can show how everyone admires them, kisses up to them, courts their approval. They are so used to this praise that they have become arrogant, disassociated from reality.

By the way, “job,” is relative in that, if your character is 15 years old, their “job” is going to school. So you’d substitute showing them at their job with showing them at school. Then again, you could do both. Maybe they have a job bussing tables after school every day. What you’re trying to do with any character is build someone who’s interesting, who isn’t your Average Jane. A high school kid who’s forced to work a job after school is a lot more interesting than a high school kid with a cushy privileged life. So look for those opportunities whenever you create a character.

Family – We can look at family in two ways. Either as the wife/husband and kids. Or the parents and extended family. What you’re going to want to focus on here is the status of these relationships, as they will have a huge effect on how your hero approaches life. For example, if your hero is like Lester Burnham in American Beauty, he lives in a family where both his wife and daughter are embarrassed by him. Every night he walks into that house, he’s emasculated. This has turned him into a sad frustrated man in all aspects of his life.

Probably one of the most important relationships you’ll establish is that of your hero’s relationship with their parents. Since there’s a lifelong desire for children to seek their parents’ approval, all you need to do to create conflict is establish some resistance from a parent, and now you have that unresolved relationship that adds complexity to your hero. If you haven’t seen Peacemaker, a central theme in the show is Peacemaker’s Alt-Right father who’s always thought Peacemaker was worthless. So Peacemaker is constantly balancing his disdain for his father against his need for his approval.

And it doesn’t just have to be parents. You can create unresolved conflict with siblings as well. There was this silly Christmas romantic comedy on Netflix this past December called Love Hard about a guy who catfishes a girl, who then surprises him by showing up at his house for Christmas. In the movie, the main guy is a loser who still lives with his parents. Meanwhile, his brother shows up for Christmas and it turns out he’s married to the perfect girl. Has the perfect job. He’s annoyingly successful at everything he does. That contrast between the two brothers led to the best laughs in the movie.

Social life – Your hero’s social life will consist of who they’re dating (or not dating), their friends, and what they do for fun. Unlike family, a hero’s friends will be more of an extension of them rather than a source of conflict. That’s because your hero chooses his friends but does not choose his family. Of course, depending on how involved the friend is in the plot, their “conflict” status may change over the course of the movie. We saw this with Annie in Bridesmaids. She starts off as having the perfect friendship with Lillian. But then, as jealousy takes over, their friendship deteriorates.

If your hero has a girlfriend or boyfriend, there will almost always be some level of conflict in their relationship. One of the most common ones is, are we going to get married? One of the two is reluctant to take that step. Another one is, are we going to have kids? Or, depending on the movie, it could be simpler. It might be that one person in the relationship is too selfish. Or they’ve been offered a job in another city and they’re thinking of taking it, putting the relationship in jeopardy. Or maybe your hero isn’t involved in a relationship at all. Maybe they’re an incel, like The 40 Year Old Virgin. And their “setting up your hero’s world” scenes are more about them *trying* to get a girlfriend than having problems with a girlfriend.

The reason you’re showing us all these things isn’t just to create contrast between the ordinary (first act) and adventure (second act) worlds. You’re doing this so we get to know your hero. The more we know your hero, the closer to them we’ll feel and, therefore, the more we’ll root for them. I’ve seen writers skimp on setting up their hero’s life and there’s a noticeable dip in our interest. We just don’t care as much because we never felt like we knew the guy in the first place.

Now that you know what to do, let’s talk about application. Because while it would seem you just tackle these issues one by one, that, unfortunately, isn’t the case with screenwriting. You will often have to set MULTIPLE THINGS up in the same scene.

Let’s take a look at a recent Disney film, Jungle Cruise, as an example. In Jungle Cruise, we meet Lily (Emily Blunt) trying to steal a map from an old governmental building. The writers could’ve stopped there. They could’ve said, “This is our hero. We’re going to dedicate an entire scene to setting her, and only her, up.” But anybody can do that. One of the things Hollywood pays writers to do is combine scenes that do multiple things, and therefore move the story along quicker.

Therefore, they had this other character namedMacGregor, who’s Lily’s brother, lobbying a group of potential investors for an expedition, in the same building. During his lobbying, Lily sneaks off to find the map. But the writers didn’t stop there. At some point in the story, they needed to introduce the primary villain, Jochaim. They could’ve done this by giving Jochaim an isolated introduction. But instead, while Lily is sneaking through the building, she bumps into Jochaim, who is very suspicious of her behavior. And, boom, just like that, the writers have set up three of the primary characters in a single scene, established what Lily does for a living, and set up the plot (follow the map to the treasure).

An interesting thing about that scene is that it’s around ten minutes long, which means the writers decided to write one big scene to set up Lily as opposed to a bunch of smaller ones. I tend to like this approach because it allows the writer to create more of a “mini-movie” with the scene, with its own little beginning, middle, and end. But, ultimately, that decision is up to you, and will be dictated by the type of story you’re telling.

How many of these “setting up your hero’s world” scenes you’ll write depends on a) if you wrote a teaser or not and b) how long your scenes are. We can figure this out with some simple math. Your inciting incident is going to come somewhere between pages 12-15. Let’s say you didn’t write a teaser. That means you have 12 pages before the inciting incident. The average scene is 2 and a half pages long. Therefore, you will write about 5 scenes that set up your hero in their world. That may drop to three, maybe even two scenes, if you have a long teaser.

Let’s not forget that this is a creative endeavor and, therefore, you can attack your story however you want. But whichever direction you choose, try to set up your hero’s job, family, and social life if possible. The more we know about your hero, the more we’ll care about them, which has an enormous effect on how invested we’ll be during the adventure (the second act).

Next First Act Post: Tuesday, March 8
Pages to write until next post: 8

Today we discuss the most important scene you will write in your entire script.

Yesterday, we discussed the teaser scene and talked about whether you should include one in your script or not. Now that you’ve decided, we can move on to either the first scene of the script (if you didn’t include a teaser) or the second scene (if you did). This is going to be your main character’s introductory scene. It is not hyperbole to say this is the most important scene in your script.

The reason for that is the same reason I bring up in half the script reviews I do. Just like nobody in real life wants to hang out with an unlikable person, no audience wants to hang around an unlikable character.  So the scene must make us like the hero on some level.  I know this word “like” is heavily debated amongst the screenwriting community.  The way I define it – insofar as what we’re trying to do – is that you must make us care about the main character enough that we want to root for him.

What’s tricky about this scene is that introducing your hero is only one piece of the puzzle. You also want to introduce their flaw. This is because there are two journeys going on in a screenplay. There’s the external journey, which entails all the physical things we see our hero do to achieve their goal. And there’s the internal journey, which is how your hero changes on the inside while all these external things are happening.

In order for a character to change, you will need to lay out what their starting point is. If they are a selfish person, and their inner journey will show them transform into a selfless person, then it’s imperative you let us know right off the bat that they’re selfish.

On top of establishing likability and a flaw, you will also need to make the scene where they’re being introduced entertaining. A critical mistake a lot of writers make is writing stillborn hero introductory scenes. It’s as if they believe that as long as they set up the character, they’ve done their job. No no no no no no. On top of everything else, the introductory scene itself needs to be entertaining.

This is going to be a theme throughout this month. You don’t get gold stars for setting up characters, setting up plot, or establishing backstory. You only get gold stars when you do all of that stuff IN ADDITION TO entertaining the reader.

So how does one do all of these things in a single scene? The most common way is to show your hero at their job encountering a relatively high-stakes problem. The reason you do this is because a problem necessitates choice and action. Your hero will have to make decisions, which will help us get to know him, and he will need to take action, which gives the scene life.

You see this in a lot of procedurals, cop movies, and serial killer flicks. We meet our hero detective as he arrives at the murder scene. The murder is the “problem.” We need to find out who did it. Or at least find a solid clue that will set us on the right path.

There are a lot of things you can in this scenario to achieve your goals. You can make our detective charming to everyone he encounters, which makes him likable. Or we can make him an underdog. He’s the low guy on the totem pole. Nobody wants him here (everybody likes an underdog so we’re immediately rooting for him). And, of course, he can outsmart the other, more seasoned, detectives, finding the clue that everyone else missed. Since audiences love smart protagonists who are great at their jobs, they immediately like this guy.

These scenes also tend to be entertaining because there’s a mystery component to them. When someone’s been murdered, audiences are curious to find out who did it. They like following someone around who’s trying to answer these questions.

The great thing about generating a problem your hero must solve is that it’s a setup that works for virtually any scenario. If your hero is an office worker, maybe they accidentally deleted their speech and have to give the big boardroom presentation from memory. If they’re a sniper, maybe they’ve been ordered to kill a madman but when they get the target in their sites, there are children in the way, which means they will have to kill the children before they kill the target. If they’re a high school teacher, maybe they’re told by the football coach that they have to reverse a failed test score so that the school’s star player can play in the championship game this weekend.

You’re just looking to put your hero in an unfavorable predicament and see how they respond. That’s the opening to everything from Raiders of the Lost Ark (must escape a crumbling cave) to Toy Story (new Christmas toys arrive to potentially replace the current ones) to The Invisible Man (must escape her evil husband’s home before he wakes up) to The Bourne Identity (a bullet-riddled man is rescued at sea but he has no idea who he is).

Introducing some sort of problem your hero has to face is one of the easiest ways to achieve all the things I talk about in this post.

In order to convey what we’re going for, I’ll highlight the best character introduction I’ve seen in the last five years. That would be the introduction of Arthur Fleck, aka The Joker, in the movie, “Joker.”

The reason I liked this intro so much is because the writer had one hell of an obstacle in front of him. He had to take a psychotic weird unpleasant man and somehow make us root for him. Or at least care about him for the next two hours. Therefore, he constructed this clever opening scene that has our hero getting attacked and humiliated. Remember that audiences will always like characters who are bullied, ganged up on, or taken advantage of.  So after this scene, we’re Team Arthur all the way.

I’ve noticed some people online point to this scene as over-the-top and trying too hard to make us like Arthur. I vehemently disagree. This character was going to be so unpleasant for such an extended period of time that the writers had to go big with his introduction. They had to make us really really really care for him. This wasn’t some Adam Sandler movie. This was a disturbed character. We had to massively tip the ‘likability’ scales early on to get people on board.

For those who haven’t seen Joker, here’s the opening scene:

I don’t want to pretend like this is easy. Screenplays are weird in that, sometimes, a story works against what the writer wants to do. For example, maybe your hero is a bank robber. What better way to introduce them than robbing a bank? But what if our bank robber also has a wife and a kid who are going to be a major part of the story? And you start thinking, “I can make my hero a lot more likable if I introduce him around his wife and kid first. And the bank robbery will have higher stakes if we know the hero has a wife and kid waiting at home. So why don’t I set the three of them up in a scene at home first, then send him off to rob the bank.”

In other words, you sacrifice the more entertaining scene – the bank robbery – for a family set-up scene. Is that the right call? Maybe. Maybe not. Funny enough, this is exactly the dilemma Joker faced. In the original script, the opening scene was Arthur meeting with a social worker. The scene did a good job getting into Arthur’s head, making him sympathetic because he obviously has mental issues. But the scene wasn’t entertaining enough to open the movie on. Which is why director Todd Phillips opted to go with the sign-stealing scene instead. It was more entertaining AND it made Arthur sympathetic.

If you can do everything in one scene, you should do it. If not, here’s how I would prioritize the three requirements of an introductory scene.

1. MAKE US LIKE HIM! – If we love your hero, we’ll be a lot less finicky about plot and story issues.
2. MAKE THE SCENE ENTERTAINING – It’s still early enough in the screenplay that a reader is ready to give up on you. So don’t just introduce your hero. Make sure the scene itself is entertaining.
3. INTRODUCE YOUR HERO’S FLAW – While I would prefer to know your hero’s flaw immediately, I don’t think it’s as important as making us like him and making the scene entertaining. If you must hold off on one of these three, you can push the introduction of the hero’s flaw back a scene or two.

Join me back here tomorrow when we talk about secondary characters as well as the scenes you’ll write before the inciting incident.

Next Post: Tomorrow (Thursday, March 3)
Pages to write until next post: 1.5

To tease or not to tease, that is the question.

It’s finally here! I’m going to guide you through the process of writing a first act in the month of March. The goal will be to write 30 pages. You might be wondering why not 25 pages, which is the page count I usually promote for a first act. It’s because first acts are always bloated. You’ll be figuring a lot of stuff out in any first act which means you’re going to run long. And that’s a good thing. It’s way easier to cut pages than add pages. So don’t feel any restraint here. It’s okay if you write a big fat first act.

To start this process off, we’re going to talk about teasers.

Should you write one? Should you not write one?

A teaser is an exciting opening scene that is often dissociated from the linear narrative and which rarely contains your main character. The bank robbery scene in The Dark Knight is a teaser scene. The black man who gets taken in a suburban white neighborhood in Get Out is a teaser scene. A well-written teaser will immediately grab the reader, which is why a lot of writers write them.

Another reason writers turn to teasers is because their story isn’t set up in such a way that it opens with an exciting scene. A perfect example is Die Hard. Die Hard actually starts out with a boring first scene because the terrorists hadn’t started doing their terrorizing yet. So we get a scene of John McClane lazily flying into Los Angeles. Now you may say, “Well isn’t this proof, Carson, that you don’t need to open with a flashy scene? Die Hard became one of the best movies of all time.”

True, but this is where I remind you that DIE HARD WAS NOT A SPEC SCRIPT. It was an adaptation. It didn’t have to win any readers over. Your script WILL need to win readers over, which is why, if your script doesn’t organically start out with an entertaining scene, you should consider a teaser.

A teaser can basically be set anywhere. You can set it 300 years ago. You can set it 3000 miles away. You can use it to introduce your villain. You can grab a fun scene from later on in the script, a practice almost every screenwriter has used at some point in their career. They’ll fast-forward to one of the cool parts of the story, use it as their teaser, then cut to present day, where we stay until we revisit this moment later on. You’ll know you’ve seen this teaser when the following scene opens with a title card that says, “3 Days Earlier.”

Teasers were basically created for increasingly impatient audiences. Back in the 70s, moviegoers just wanted to sit down and relax. They didn’t give a sh#t if it took an hour to set up the film. But these days people are ready to move on if they get a mildly amusing text from their work buddy, Chuggs. So teasers have become a tool to combat boredom.

But teasers bring with them their own bag of problems. I often read teasers that don’t deserve the teaser title. A weak teaser I commonly run into is a woman driving her car down an empty wooded road at night (or a character in some dark secluded place where no one can hear you scream). She runs out of gas so she pulls over. She then thinks she sees someone up ahead. So she gets out of her car, walks forward, and asks if anyone is there. Then we see her eyes grow big as she sees something off-screen. Whatever the thing is, it attacks her. But before we can see the attack, the scene ends.

Not only is this a really boring predictable teaser I’ve seen a million times already. But it’s too short. It doesn’t give us any unique information. A teaser scene is almost like a mini-movie. It needs detail. It shouldn’t operate on generalities and cliches. The Hans Landa opening in Inglorious Basterds is a great teaser. Or the babysitter scene in Scream. These are full scenes – mini-movies if you will – that provide a very specific and entertaining story.

But therein lies the second issue when you write teasers – especially long teasers – which is that it f#cks up your page structure. There’s so much you have to set up in a screenplay. So if you write a long teaser scene, such as the one Tarantino wrote in Inglorious Basterds, that pushes your entire structure back 12 pages (the length of the scene). So instead of the inciting incident happening on page 12. It’s now happening on page 24.

I’ve seen many writers get confused by this. They’ll still try to hit their beats going off a traditional first act breakdown. So they’ll try and come up with an inciting incident immediately after their 12 page teaser is over, since page 12-15 is when your inciting incident is supposed to happen. Except how can you disrupt a character’s life (which is what the inciting incident does) if you haven’t even shown us that life yet?

This leads to writers talking themselves into things. They’ll say stuff like, “Well, that moment in the teaser did disrupt my hero’s life so that means it’s the inciting incident,” when that might not be the case.

As you can see, whether or not you start with a teaser is a big decision. There are repercussions to using them. Which is why I prefer that writers start with a scene that grabs the reader right away, *but is within the flow of the story.* It’s not an isolated teaser from another time or place. It introduces us to our hero. It shows them doing something interesting. A good example of this would be the opening scene for Don’t Look Up. We see our main character, played by Jennifer Lawrence, discover the comet that’s going to collide with earth.

You could’ve done this with Die Hard, by the way. You could’ve started with John McClane taking down a criminal back in New York. Then, the very next day, he has to head to Los Angeles. But therein lies the opening scene paradox. You are supposed to start your screenplay as late as possible. The later you start it, the quicker we get to the good stuff. If you start Die Hard back in New York with John McClane taking down a bad guy, you are not starting your story as late as possible.

To summarize, I prefer opening scenes that grab the reader, but are within the flow of the story. These scenes allow you to set up your character as well as the world they live in. So you’re getting more bang for your buck. However, if your story doesn’t allow this, consider a teaser. Because it is imperative that you grab the reader right away. And if a teaser is the only way to do that, then write a teaser. Remember that readers have formed their opinion of you as a writer, formed an opinion on the first scene you’ve written, and formed an opinion on if they think your script has any chance at all at being good, all within the first couple of pages. So if you lay out a dud scene right away, forget about it.

There was this movie that came out in 2000 called, “Mission to Mars” which was as awful as the title implies. All the reviews of that movie highlighted that they knew it was going to be a bad movie based on the first scene. That’s because the scene took place at a barbecue with a bunch of the movie’s astronauts. The writer’s pursuit was noble. He thought the party was a perfect way to get all the astronauts in one place and, therefore, quickly set them up. But because it resulted in a ten minute scene of characters lazily chatting with each other, the audience checked out before the real story could even begin. That is the danger of writing a weak opening scene.

Technically, you only have to write 1.5 pages today but I figure most writers are going to be writing full scenes. So just try to write one scene today. It’s okay if you get ahead of the class. You can use the extra time at the end of each week to go back and rewrite your scenes. Or you can charge ahead and try to write the first act as quickly as possible. With that said, you’ll be missing specific instructions from me about each section you’re entering so take that into account.

Pages to write until next post: 1.5
Next Post: Tomorrow (Wednesday, March 2)

P.S. Let me know in the comments if there is anything about the first act that you want me to cover over the next month!

The March Scriptshadow Newsletter is in your inboxes!

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In this month’s newsletter, I discuss a new method to ensure your screenplays never get boring. I share my thoughts on the next Showdown, which will be a radical departure from previous Showdowns. I give my thoughts on that new Lord of the Rings trailer, as well as a spec sale, a book sale, and a short story sale. I also highlight one of the spookiest horror shorts I’ve ever seen. Finally, I review a script that should be the prototype for making the Black List.

Okay, it’s FINALLY time. Starting tomorrow, you are going to begin writing the first act of a new screenplay! I am going to guide you through the process, going through all the little details of what each section should look like so that your first act rocks. After this de facto class, you’ll never struggle with writing a first act again.

The schedule is going to be messy, though. I’ll typically post three “First Act” articles a week, as well as one script review a week. All script reviews will focus on the script’s first act. However, there are snags we’ll have to deal with. We have the Amateur Showdown winning script review on Friday. I also plan to review the new Batman movie next Monday. So each week will probably have a small bump in the road.

In getting you prepped for tomorrow, let’s remind you what a typical first act looks like.

You’ll start off by introducing us to a character living an unfulfilled life. The reason they are unfulfilled is because that gives them room to grow (and transform) over the the course of the story. In addition to meeting your hero, we will follow them through their daily life, where we will learn about their job and the people in their orbit.

Something will then happen to jolt your hero’s life off its axis. This is often called the “inciting incident,” and it throws everything into disarray. Your hero will resist the change this new event brings. At a certain point, however, he will reluctantly accept the challenge, and he will go off on an adventure. Once he walks out that door, your first act is over.

The Hero’s Journey is the most traditional story and follows a character who’s yanked away from their home and thrust into a wild adventure. For that reason, The Hero’s Journey is the easiest first act to write. All the beats are clearly laid out for you.

Unfortunately, not every story lines up this way. You could be writing Cloud Atlas, which will have an untraditional first act. You could be writing a contained thriller, like Cloverfield Lane, that doesn’t have an adventure. You could be writing “Old,” where everybody just gets stuck on a beach. You could be writing “Before Sunrise,” where two people meet and just start talking for 90 minutes. You could be writing Pulp Fiction, where the non-linear first act is showing us things that happen after as opposed to before. You could be writing Joker where all the first act does is set up a disturbed character. There’s no “adventure” in that movie.

The point is that every story has different requirements. There is no one-size-fits-all first act. However, if there is a main character and that character has a goal they must achieve, then the first act steps I lay out this month should work for 95% of you.

As for page-writing requirements, technically, you only have to write one page per day. However, the schedule I’m laying out for you will have you moving a little quicker. I want you to write ten pages a week. That’s because I want to use the final week to go back into the act and clean it up. Here’s a rough outline of the posting schedule.

WEEK 1 – FIRST 10 PAGES

First Post – Figuring out whether to write a teaser or not. The pros and cons of teasers.

Second Post – The introduction of your main character and their flaw.

Third Post – Setting up your hero’s daily life; job, family, social.

WEEK 2 – SECOND 10 PAGES

First Post – Scene-writing. How to make sure you’re not just setting things up but rather keeping the reader entertained with well-written scenes.

Second Post -The Inciting incident. Your hero’s world is thrown into disarray.

Third Post – Introducing a memorable antagonist.

WEEK 3 – THIRD 10 PAGES

First Post -Dealing with all the excess exposition and setup involved in first acts.

Second Post – Refusal of the Call. The hero will cling to his flawed life, do anything to avoid change.

Third Post – Setting up that all important GSU.

WEEK 4 – THE CHALLENGES YOU WILL FACE

This week will be dedicated to the specific issues that come up over the first three weeks. I’ll address common questions, common concerns, and share certain hacks I’ve discovered over the years for dealing with first act frustrations. The quality of these posts will depend on you. So make sure you’re asking plenty of questions in the comments!

You should already have your concept picked out, a bare-bones outline written, and a good sense of who your main character is as well as their major flaw. If you have that, you should fly through this challenge. For those who have chosen a more “thrown into the lion’s den” approach to your first act, don’t worry. I will be there for you every step of the way and I *WILL* make sure you have a first act at the end of this.

Can’t wait to see what you guys come up with. Warm up those fingers and I’ll seeya tomorrow!