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Week 1 – Concept
Week 2 – Solidifying Your Concept
Week 3 – Building Your Characters
Week 4 – Outlining
Week 5 – The First 10 Pages
Week 6 – Inciting Incident
Week 7 – Turn Into 2nd Act
Week 8 – Fun and Games
Week 9 – Using Sequences to Tackle Your Second Act
Week 10 – The Midpoint
Week 11 – Chill Out or Ramp Up
Week 12 – Lead Up To the “Scene of Death”
Week 13 – Moment of Death
Week 14 – The Climax
Week 15 – The End!
Week 16 – Rewrite Prep 1
Writing is rewriting.
That’s what they tell us, anyway.
I think of writing more as problem-solving.
You write a script. You read it back. There are parts of it you don’t like. Now you gotta figure out how to fix those parts.
Usually, one of three things happens when you write a script.
The first is that you write something very close to what you imagined the script would be. This is the ideal situation and requires the least amount of rewriting.
The second is that the script becomes something different from what you imagined. You realize that this new direction is more interesting and your rewrites focus on detouring the script towards this new idea. The first draft of The Sixth Sense was about a kid who paints images from the future. It obviously became something much better than that.
The third is that your script becomes something different from what you imagined but you DON’T like this new version. This can happen because a script is a living breathing thing. It wants to take you where it wants to take you. So it’s very easy to lose control of it. In this case, your rewrites work to get the script back on track.
Regardless of which of these issues you run into, your job is to troubleshoot what the main problems are and then write up a plan to fix them. I’m partial to creating an outline for rewrites. I like the guidance that they give me. You can rewrite off memory and feel but, in these early stages, when you’re on your first or second draft, there are so many issues with the script that it’s advantageous to give yourself as detailed a fix-it-up guide as possible.
After last week, you should have identified the major problems in your script. When it comes to script problems, there is a hierarchy of the worst problems you can have. These are problems that, if they are present in your script, it’s going to be a loooong rewrite process. In some cases, it may be a rewrite you don’t want to do. These top things are…
Conceptual problem – This is the hardest script problem to fix in the business. If your concept is weak or isn’t working, the only way to fix it is to come up with another concept and rewrite the entire script. A good example of this is Megalopolis, the upcoming Francis Ford Coppola movie which I did a script review on years ago. The concept is so confused and nebulous that the story never knows what it is. Which is why everyone who’s seen the movie has hated it.
A boring main character – This is the guide who’s taking the reader through your story. So if we don’t like him, or don’t care about him, or don’t find him compelling in some way, it doesn’t matter if you have a great concept and a great plot. We won’t care. And the thing with character problems is that they’re very hard to fix. Because characters are based on people and people are complex. So there is no perfect recipe to create a character people love. Believe me, Hollywood has tried. I’ve helped writers through rewrites where we’ve tried 10 different versions of a character that wasn’t working and none of them fixed the character. So this one is, indeed, a toughie.
Weak structure – The main thing that good structure provides is an ENGINE underneath every section of the story so that the story always has pace. The second your structure weakens, the reader will find it difficult to stay interested. They won’t feel like there’s a reason to keep reading. This happened with a script I consulted on not long ago where the story’s major question was resolved at the end of the second act. So then why do we need to keep reading the third act?
If you’re dealing with any of these things, it’s going to be a tough rewrite. But, as long as you know what the problem is, you can start putting effort towards solving it.
To give you an idea of some other problems you may encounter, here is a list of script problems from consultations I did this year…
- A weak villain.
- A major character who doesn’t tonally match the rest of the screenplay (all the other characters are operating in a drama while this character is operating in a thriller).
- The writer makes the path way too easy for their main character, giving them no major obstacles to overcome. This results in very little drama.
- Little-to-no setup. We’re thrust into the story before we know or care about any of the characters.
- (Specific Example) Two characters know each other well. Years later, one of them is going to try and con the other. He gets plastic surgery so he doesn’t look like his former self. They then spend hours upon hours together for the con and, somehow, the mark never suspects that this is his old friend he used to know.
- Script lacks detail and specificity in both the world and the characters, leaving the story feeling thin and surface-level.
- Doesn’t exploit the uniqueness of the concept enough.
- Major moments lack authenticity. They all feel artificially manufactured rather than something that would happen in real life.
- Script covers way too many characters and subplots, leaving no time for the plot to move forward, resulting in a slow stale narrative.
- Script follows only two characters on a repetitive journey, so we get restless quickly.
As you can see, there are tons of issues that can pop up in a screenplay. I can’t go over every major one and tell you how to fix it. That would make this a 250,000 word post. But I can take you through the big three.
Conceptual problem – You usually can’t fix this. Which is why I tell writers to get logline consultations from me BEFORE THEY WRITE THEIR SCRIPTS (Just $25 – e-mail me at carsonreeves1@gmail.com if you want one) so I can save them a lot of time. A conceptual problem is a page 1 rewrite so just make sure that if you *do* adjust your concept that, THIS TIME, you get confirmation from other people you trust that it’s a good movie idea. I’ve watched writers spend, literally half-a-decade trying to make a script work that will never work due to its weak concept.
Boring main character – The most common reasons for a boring main character are that they are PASSIVE and they have LITTLE-TO-NO PERSONALITY. So start by making them more active. And then give them some personality. Make them funnier, more intelligent, more eccentric, more polarizing, more conflicted, stranger. Too many writers overlook personality when it comes to their protagonists. Don’t be one of them. But honestly? Audiences LOVE active characters. So just making your character more active can accomplish a LOT.
Weak structure – Make sure your major beats are happening where they should. In a 120 page screenplay, the inciting incident happens on page 15. The first act break at 30. The midpoint at 60. The second act break on page 90. From there, make sure there is always a GOAL, PROBLEM, MYSTERY, or COMPELLING UNRESOLVED ISSUE driving each section of the screenplay. So, for example, if you’re bored reading your script on page 50, ask yourself, “Do my characters have a goal in this section? Or is there a mystery they want the answer for?” Or is there a problem that needs to be resolved? These are the things that create an engine underneath the story. If there are no goals, no mysteries, no problems, no unresolved issues… of course that section of your script is going to be boring.
So, your homework for this week is to write out your plan of attack for your rewrite. You can do this in a couple of ways. For those of you who hate outlining, just write up the 3-5 biggest problems in your script so that you can see those problems with your own eyes. If you want to write quick solutions to them, that’s fine as well. This “lazy man’s” outline approach can be confined to a single page.
For the rest of you, I would try to write up a detailed outline for how you’re going to fix this thing. You can divide this up however how you want. For example, you can say, “Pages 1-15” and then write out what you’re going to do inside those pages to address the problems. Or you can get really detailed and break it down by individual scene. Then write out what you need to do in that scene that will address the script issues that you have.
Here’s a snippet from an old novel outline I wrote up (a missing girl narrative). It’s not going to make sense but you can see how detailed I get. The different color text is to visually keep track of a subplot. When you write a novel, you’re dealing with 100,000 plus words so it’s infinitely harder to track everything. You should be happy you only have to manage 20,000 words!
The more you have written down, the more ready you’re going to be for the rewrite. Cause next week, we start writing again. So this is your last chance to get all your thoughts together. And, by the way, the Mega Showdown where you’ll be able to enter this script is going to be on July 25th. So we’re going to be moving through this rewrite pretty quickly.
All right, get to work! Oh, and please share your own tips and tricks for rewriting in the comments!
